can someone proof read this page about a quote from the love hypothesis??? and give any comments or things i should add to make it better. everything in green i may change or the wording is off

Answer:
comma after tyically; don't use the part in the parenthesis, comma after other hand, adam never silently judged her?
Explanation:
also don't use the word after the paretnthesis, i dont think you know what it means