1. Jack is writing an article about the importance of organic food for a local newspaper. Consider his working thesis statement: I truly believe that organic foods contain more nutrients. How should Jack revise the thesis statement?
A. Jack should broaden the thesis statement.
B. Jack should also discuss the benefits of non-organic foods in his thesis.
C. He should add example of the nutritional profiles of organic and inorganic carrots.
D. He should remove the phrase "I truly believe that"
2. Paulo has an assignment for his writing class to describe his favorite place. Here is his thesis statement: I think that my favorite place to go is the waterfall near my home.
How should Paulo revise the thesis statement?
A. Remove the phrase "I think."
B. Rewrite the thesis as if he were writing a travel brochure advertising the waterfall.
C. Make the thesis statement less assertive.
D. Make his thesis more grounded in facts.
E. Add a second destination to his list of favorite places.
3. Mr. Reynolds, a lawyer, is applying for a new law firm. Consider this thesis for his letter of application: As a lawyer with a lot of experience, I have helped many people in their cases.
Which of the following options is the best revision of the thesis statement?
A. I recently won a wrongful imprisonment suit.
B. I believe that I am the best lawyer in the world.
C. I am a very good lawyer.
D. My experience, passion, and record will be asset to your firm.
4. Quinn has been asked to describe the process of applying for college to seniors back at his high school. Consider his working thesis:
Applying to college is as easy as 1-2-3.
What is the most effective revision of this thesis statement?
A. Applying to college is simple because all you have to do is pick a school, fill out the forms, and wait for your acceptance letter.
B. Appling to college is simple.
C. Expect delays and frustration because picking schools, filling out forms, and waiting is not easy.
D. Plan for each step of the process—picking schools, filling out forms, and waiting—to take much longer than expected.
5. Chaquita is writing an essay for her English course in which she is persuading her classmates to vote in the upcoming election. Here is her thesis statement:
It is important to have a say in the election.
What is the most effective revision of this thesis statement?
A. Voter registration is simple, quick, and invaluable.
B. Don't vote? Don't complain!
C. Voting is the most amazing thing that you could ever do.
D. The thesis does not need to be revised.

1. Option D ‘He should remove the phrase "I truly believe that"’. Although giving examples and adding more information would support his thesis (for example, comparisons between the thesis he is defending against the one he is not, like option C), the idea of using personal phrases such as “I believe” is not proper for a newspaper informative article, unless is an opinion article in which the reader is expected to encounter this kind of resources.

2. Option C “Make his thesis more grounded in facts”. As he is expressing his opinion, he needs to back it up with additional information, in order to support the idea he is writing about.

3. Option D “My experience, passion, and record will be asset to your firm”. Is a proper, formal way to describe his intended thesis and to suggest his capabilities make him the one for the position, as he seeks the approval of the firm to get the desired job.

4. Option A “Applying to college is simple because all you have to do is pick a school, fill out the forms, and wait for your acceptance letter”. This is the suitable way to inform that the process is easy, describing the steps so to support her opinion and also seniors know what to expect in their application processes.

5. Option D “The thesis does not need to be revised”. The original statement provided by Chaquita is well written, proper for an essay, and by adding some more information and facts could be very persuading.

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