Question

Read the sentence below and answer the question that follows.

While Aynsley Dunbar has drummed in some of the greatest rock bands of all time, his style incorporates jazz, fusion, blues, and playing progressive rock.

What is wrong with the sentence?

The ideas are not coordinate.
It lacks parallel structure.
There’s excessive coordination.
It has an incorrect coordinate conjunction.

Answer 1

It has an incorrect coordinate conjunction.

Answer 2

The correct answer is "It has an incorrect coordinate conjunction".

The way in which the word "while" is being used in this sentence creates confusion. When the word "while" is employed to tie together two events that are occuring at the same time, it's serving as a coordinating conjuction. However that's not the case in the sentence given. Here, the word "while" is being used incorrectly as a coordinating conjunction and showcases how negatively it affects the understanding of the excerpt.

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