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The date was 12th march 2020.I was coming back from writing my end-of-term exams when my mom broke the news to me: “The first case of the corona virus has been identified here in Kenya; I don’t think there’ll be an exam tomorrow. The government has ordered a lockdown and we have to stay at home." At first, I didn’t take this seriously but little did I know that my whole life was about to go down the primrose path! I couldn’t go to school, I couldn't go to the mall - or anywhere else for that matter. Unfortunately, I wouldn't see my friends for a year and a half. About a week later, my parents received an email from school saying that we would attend online lessons from eight o’clock in the morning to three o’clock in the afternoon. At first, this was a scary experience as I had never been on a video call on the platform so there was no way of telling if my camera was on or off or if my microphone was muted or unmuted. After about a week or two of attending online lessons, I got more comfortable with it and soon got used to it. Also needed new equipment because my back started hurting and I got other types of illness. Ever since I started online school, I would be waiting for the day that the government would announce that the lockdown was over but they kept postponing it until the situation was more controllable. Weeks passed and we were still stuck at home with nothing to do. This was frustrating because I was used to getting up early and going to school. However, things were not so bad after all. I could wake up late now because I did not have to worry about changing into a school uniform or the time taken to travel from home to school and back. This also meant that I could have more leisure time because as soon as school was over I could finish all my work. I got used to it faster than everyone because I was especially good at ict. even though I was used to it now, there was a problem …boredom. I was just not used to sitting in front of a computer screen for long. I would feel itchy sitting on my chair and start moving around. My legs would hurt because of low blood circulation and I would also get “pins and needles” quite often. As time passed, I realized I was gaining weight and it was not healthy. Back when I used to go to school, I used to move a lot, which meant I was constantly burning fat but now I was stuck at home and could barely do anything. This was easily fixed when my dad bought a few gym equipment, which I could use to keep myself fit. Phone calls and FaceTime kept me connected with my friends. Even though it was not as good as meeting them in person, it was better than nothing. This kept going for about a year until finally, the government released the lock down and we met in school shortly after that. I will never forget this experience.

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The date was March 12, 2020. I was returning after finishing my end-of-term examinations when my mother informed me, "The first case of the corona virus has been found here in Kenya; I don't believe there will be a test tomorrow." "The government has declared a state of emergency, and we must remain at home." I didn't take it seriously at first, but little did I realize that my entire life was about to take a turn for the worse! I couldn't go to school, the mall, or anywhere else. I wasn't going to see my friends for another year and a half.My parents received an email from school about a week later informing them that we would be attending online sessions beginning at 8:00 a.m. to 3 p.m. This was a stressful experience at first, since I had never been on a video call on the platform before, so I had no idea if my camera was turned on or off, or whether my microphone was muted or not. After a week or two of taking online sessions, I felt more at ease and quickly became accustomed to it. I also need new equipment since my back began to suffer and I became unwell in various ways. I'd been waiting for the day the government would declare that the lock down was lifted since I started online school, but they kept putting it off until the situation was more under control. We were still stranded at home with nothing to do after many weeks. This was readily remedied when my father purchased some gym equipment for me to use in order to stay fit. Phone calls and Face Time allowed me to stay in touch with my pals. It wasn't as wonderful as meeting them in person, but it was better than nothing. This went on for approximately a year until the government lifted the lock down and we all met in school shortly thereafter. This is an experience I will never forget.

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