Question

Dylan wrote the following sentence for his research paper on giraffes.

The wide savannah is roamed by tall, graceful giraffes.

His teacher told him to revise this sentence so that it is more appropriate for formal writing. Explain to Dylan how to revise the sentence.

Answer 1

Answer:

Tall, graceful giraffes roam the wide savannah.

Explanation:

i dont know how to explain it but i think thats right

Answer 2

Answer:

Tall, graceful giraffes roam the wide savannah. You can revise the sentence by  describing the giraffes first.

Explanation: