Which revision is the best example of adding concrete
details?
O The firefighters responded when "shouts of 'Fire!'
were heard" (Murphy 33). They were quick to arrive
but had already wasted time.
O Tired and unsteady, the firefighters were not
prepared for the job. It took a while.
O A signal mistake cost time because "dozens of
firefighters were sent on a wild-goose chase"
(Murphy 33).
