Question

Read the opening sentence from a draft of a document-
based essay on government authority in Nazi Germany,
Which example is the best revision of this sentence?
Draft:
In Nazi Germany, the government
censored the press.
In Nazi Germany, the government censored the press by
preventing newspapers from publishing articles that
opposed Nazi ideology.
Censorship of the press in Nazi Germany was a big
problem for many newspapers and magazines.
In Nazi Germany, censorship of the press was pretty
bad, but it could have been a whole lot worse.
Censorship of the press was not only a problem in Nazi
Germany, it also occurred in the fascist state of Italy.

Answer 1

Answer:

Option A

Explanation:

Draft: In Nazi Germany, the government censored the press.

In Nazi Germany, the government censored the press by preventing newspapers from publishing articles that opposed Nazi ideology is the best revision of the daft sentence.

During the Military Government of the Nazis and Hitler regime in Germany, news agencies censorship was strictly enforced by the governing Nazi Party to control the flow of all forms of mass communication to its citizens. Media and news agencies were only allowed to publish information that supported antisemitism and ruthless methods were used to make sure their propaganda was sustain. The censorship was extreme to the point of telling the media agencies of keeping the surrendered of Germany in World War II a secret.

Answer 2

Answer:

The answer is A: In Nazi Germany, the government censored the press by preventing newspapers from publishing articles that opposed Nazi ideology.

Explanation:

This is the case because the original opening sentence was bland and provided no detail.  "In Nazi Germany, the government censored the press by preventing newspapers from publishing articles that opposed Nazi ideology." is the correct option because it provides an idea of what the essay will be about and it grabs the reader's attention.  

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