Question

Read the cover letter below and answer the question that follows.



To whom it may concern:

I am interested in the job I saw postd in the lunchroom at Jefferson high school. I’ve babysat neighborhood children a couple of times and I think it’d be fun to work in a preschool.

Children seem to like me and I don’t mind hanging out with them. It’s pretty easy to keep them amused. I know that working at the preschool will be different than being in someones house, but I think I can handle it. I learn quickly and am pretty flexible about most things.

I’m looking forward to talking to you about this position. I can’t start until after the holidays, but I can work any afternoon except Fridays.

Thanks!

Lisa Sullay



How can this letter be made more effective?

Answer 1

Answer:

It sounds too casual

Explanation:

It can be made more effective by adding a more professional tone and add more specific details about themselves or there past experience working which would hopefully encourage the reader to invite her to an interview. There is also currently punctuation and spelling errors in her letter which won't look good to a possible future employer.