Question

Read the excerpt from a student’s essay.
Working to go to the Grove City Music Festival is a good goal for the school band. Only the best school bands are invited, so this will motivate each student to practice. Also, we will have to work together to earn money, and this will improve our team spirit. Please, please let us go to the music festival!

Which is the best revision of the concluding sentence?
(A) Music festivals allow many school groups to meet and compete in a formal environment.

(B)The Grove City Music Festival is the oldest, most important band competition in the state.

(C) Many other school bands attend the music festival and say it is a lot of fun.

(D) Planning for the Grove City Music Festival will encourage the band to practice and work together.

Answer 1

The best revision of the concluding sentence is, Planning for the Grove City Music Festival will encourage the band to practice and work together.

Answer: Option D.

Explanation:

The concluding sentence of any paragraph is its closure. It is basically the a sentence which summarize the argument. The above mentioned excerpt is about the Grove City Mangrove Festival, the concluding sentence provided in the excerpt is quite informal and doesn't have much effect.

So if we have to revise the concluding sentence, then it would most certainly be this, 'Planning for the Grove City Music Festival will encourage the band to practice and work together.' We can see that this sentence explains in a logical way about the benefits of attaining the music festival. Sentences which makes use of logos are easily understood and helps in influencing people.

Answer 2

Answer:

(D) Planning for the Grove City Music Festival will encourage the band to practice and work together.