Question

The 15 percent increase in orchestra enrollment is in-your-face proof that publicity pays off. What is most needed to strengthen this statement? facts and statistics grammatical revisions a personal anecdote academic language

Answer 1

This statement needs facts and statistics behind it. To believe it, I would need to know more about the publicity and see demonstrated that it had a direct effect on enrollment. The lack of context is jarring and confusing.

Answer 2

This statement needs facts and statistics in order to be strengthened.

This statement provides certain information. However, that information lacks veracity, that is, it does not seem reliable or accurate as it lacks facts or statistics to prove and support what is stated.

Statistics are numbers or facts that are implemented to provide convincing information. Thus, the reader wont be able to argue with facts and will feel that statistics will prove what the writer is saying. They are employed to convince a reader and to provide factual weight to an argument.