I would appreciate it if you could revise this sentence and make changes with order and if you describe it a different way it is okay as long as at the core it is the same. For this sentence, context is a college student just received news that her sister had a baby girl
"As soon as I got the news I shared it with my entire sorority house; leaping over couches, sprinting across tabletops, and screaming her name" If you could provide explanations for your changes, that would be great!

Respuesta :

"I leaped over couches and sprinted across tabletops, sharing with my entire sorority house the name of my new sister."

I don't know if it has to be word for word but that is the general idea of the order. It just sounds better after explaining this college students actions. I hope this does help somewhat. I am sorry if it doesn't.

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